Comments on: Ierne: The Raid http://www.dmperez.com/2010/01/20/ierne-the-raid/ DMPerez.com - The Domain of Daniel M.Perez Wed, 25 Jan 2012 19:23:10 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Daniel M. Perez http://www.dmperez.com/2010/01/20/ierne-the-raid/comment-page-1/#comment-4275 Daniel M. Perez Thu, 21 Jan 2010 12:38:23 +0000 http://www.dmperez.com/?p=1806#comment-4275 <a href="#comment-4251" rel="nofollow">@JJ </a>, <a href="#comment-4254" rel="nofollow">@Mick Bradley </a> Thanks so much, guys. I really appreciate you take the time to give me feedback. It's been a long time since I wrote fiction and I'm fighting my own insecurities with each scene. Your comment, JJ, makes me blush. If I could talk specifically about the technical aspect of the writing without sounding pretentious: With these Ierne vignettes I'm going for a very specific tone, kind of emulating the way the old stories are written down. There's a sparseness of prose coupled with a richness of color that truly gives them their personality. That's what I'm shooting for. That and trying to emulate a narrated form in text. The repetition right in the first paragraph may be weird in a purely-written form, but it would be an excellent technique in an oral delivery. I guess in the end I'm going for a transcribed-from-the-narrated-version form. Thanks for making me think about this. @JJ , @Mick Bradley
Thanks so much, guys. I really appreciate you take the time to give me feedback. It’s been a long time since I wrote fiction and I’m fighting my own insecurities with each scene.

Your comment, JJ, makes me blush. If I could talk specifically about the technical aspect of the writing without sounding pretentious:

With these Ierne vignettes I’m going for a very specific tone, kind of emulating the way the old stories are written down. There’s a sparseness of prose coupled with a richness of color that truly gives them their personality. That’s what I’m shooting for. That and trying to emulate a narrated form in text. The repetition right in the first paragraph may be weird in a purely-written form, but it would be an excellent technique in an oral delivery. I guess in the end I’m going for a transcribed-from-the-narrated-version form.

Thanks for making me think about this.

]]> By: Mick Bradley http://www.dmperez.com/2010/01/20/ierne-the-raid/comment-page-1/#comment-4254 Mick Bradley Wed, 20 Jan 2010 23:14:05 +0000 http://www.dmperez.com/?p=1806#comment-4254 Good work, JJ! That's a very apt comment - "economy-of-phrasing." Keep it up, Daniel. Good work, JJ! That’s a very apt comment – “economy-of-phrasing.”

Keep it up, Daniel.

]]> By: JJ http://www.dmperez.com/2010/01/20/ierne-the-raid/comment-page-1/#comment-4251 JJ Wed, 20 Jan 2010 19:36:43 +0000 http://www.dmperez.com/?p=1806#comment-4251 I really enjoyed the description of the carnage without all the gory detail. You have a very nice economy of phrasing. Edge-of-seat fun. I really enjoyed the description of the carnage without all the gory detail. You have a very nice economy of phrasing. Edge-of-seat fun.

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